Tropical <DaGirlWivNoName>
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 | wow!!!!!!!!! | 9/23/07 | ||
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 taht was brilliant. It was like i was actually there i had an amzingly clear picture in my head. That was just sooo good carry writing and i think you could go far. much love tinkerbell xxxxxxxxx | ||||
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| Hardcore Girls Teens Nude Fuck Fucking My Kids School Teacher | 7/21/07 | ||
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| Hardcore Girls Teens Nude Fuck Fucking My Kids School Teacher | 7/13/07 | ||
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| Full marks! | 6/25/07 | ||
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 A lot of things I would've done differently but well done. Have a look at my stuff and leave a review! Check out my authors page! | ||||
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| u story puled me in | 6/24/07 | ||
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 wen i read it it was like i was there and i cud imaginb ur every word i may only be 16 and some may say im nt wise enuf or mature enuf to haver a deep understandin of ur first story but id do ,u described an ideal world wit no troubles and we all need a place to go in tyms of trouble write bak plz lv kev xxx  | ||||
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| Second Story | 6/12/07 | ||
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 While I'm not a writer or an avid reader I did enjoy the second story. Its topic was something you can capture well but I think you require some more practise. Like others it was a bit too descriptive (even for I, I am not in the year school system). It seems to be a story of modern teenage romance in all its gorey detail (perhaps you could find more material in the wait and not the couple stage). I am giving you three stars for it, but I am taking two away for the over use of description and (sorry about this-bit of a fanatic on this one) grammer and punctuation. regards, Declan | ||||
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| posted by Declan Clifford | ||||
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| crap | 6/10/07 | ||
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 crao as nythin | ||||
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| good read | 5/24/07 | ||
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  Pulls you into the story but i felt in places you over described things. Otherwise it was a good piece of writing and i enjoyed it. | ||||
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| Good but Distracting | 5/22/07 | ||
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 Imagery here is what I loved. I would have given you 5 but your overuse of superlatives and many mechanical mistakes distracted me. I couldn't engage as well as I might have liked. Well I suppose that's what editors are for, aren't they. Little tweaking and you could give Celia Ahern a run for her money. | ||||
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| posted by Seán Maguire | ||||
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