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The Life Of John Barnes-The Journey Of A Lifetime <jbtjofl>

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	review of the book"The Life of John Barnes" The first chapter "The Beginning"	12/28/07
	Its a cute story but could use some eventual editing before you decide to do anything permanent with your book. Your sentences need a little bit of rewording and also with the sequences. And when people talk to one another you would usually put things in such as -" or " etc. I am being too picky. I am sorry. I really do like the story so far. I want to continue reading the rest. I enjoyed it very much. Thank you so much for sharing it with us.
	posted by Carol Barnes-McKinstry