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High school nightmares
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- Profile created: January 2008
- www.bebo.com/sams-story
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- Romance
- Tagline
- And he just looked at me, and left...
- Me, Myself, and I
- Samantha Elizabeth Londis, Sam for short, is the most popular girl in the school. All the girls wanna be her, and all the boys wanna date her. But behind her glamourous blue eyes, and her straight, black hair, all is not well. Her parents are going through a messy divorce, and shes falling in love with her ex-best friend, William Collin-smith. Who, unfortunatly happens to be the biggest Emo in school. Bullied by most, this boy is definatly not a date option. Stuck between friends and love, Sam is facing her most difficult choice yet: could she give up her popularity for the boy she loves? Find out in this story of heartbreak, hardships and friends.
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5/16/09
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6/8/08
OllieRawrr
hullo, please write more! it is so good and im dying inside without reading more! gyaa! write write
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Ice Phoenix6/4/08awwwwwww THNX!!! 5 stars
sooo glad u liked it *blushes shyly...* i'm working on a new story atm, tho it's already nearly finished
'Derelict Cast Off' it's in the sayin thing...
<3 wld give u love but ran out... sori...
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Ice Phoenix6/1/08
ur a fan of my story 'Will i ever see you again' ... Jamie and Jewel... thnx! yh, i may have just realised.i have a few stories im fans of >which means in real life about 50< and i was tryin' 2 work out where i saw ur pic b4. btw, i <3 ur story... its so sweet with Will in chapter 7, is there anymore coming? write bk? on, http://www.bebo.com/willieverseeyouagain or my profile? xxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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Brandi4/3/08your story is ok, i liked it kinda. But where was the dad at when he died really? And it kinda seemed like she was sorta calm through it you know sept the tears. But if thats your best thats your best. You did get a story out so you know thats good. Have fun writing more! Hope its good to!!
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4/3/08
Dread These Moments Alone
btw an example about the emotions part: "The news hit me like a fist, beating into my face and squeezing out tears. I stumbled along the street, my thoughts whirling around my head, how could he leave me like that? I needed him...didn't he think about that? WIth this last thought anger soared into play, and i lashed out at a fence i passed, listening to the 'cling' of the chain links, smashing angrily into each other." also, how did the father know about will etc?? coz she hadn't told anyone :S but v good kay! keep it up, hope this helped XXX P.S if u can check out 1 of mine? id love it
http://BlackAndWhiteLove.bebo.com >> story unedited http://MatchLitLove.bebo.com >> story (work in progress) http://ExplorationOfMyMind.bebo.com >> short stories, interesting concepts http://MyInsight.bebo.com >> poetry of my life
















this is sooo goood! wow, this is really good! i really related to it unlike others ive read! these stories are the ones that inspire me to write my own! 5 stars! you've earned it!
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by Danniisaur 9/23/09O. M. F. G.!!! I loved it!!! Plz plz plz plz plz cn u write more!! its so awesome!
by CharleeyyB 5/1/09OMFG Finsh it PLEASE!!!
by XxBeautiful-Disasterxx 2/11/09:] Yeah.
by M'J 10/4/08I liked your story, it pretty great, though maybe it could do with a bit more detail ?
Maybe you could check mine out.
the links are on my page x thanks.
Make sure you update soon
sori, i noticed i ddnt write a review... i h8 it when it happenz 2 me,
by Ice Phoenix 6/1/08is there more?
wana find out what happenz!
its gooooooddddd!!!!!!
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SUPER GOOD!! i love this book! Great job!
by OllieRawrr 4/23/08when do we get to hear the rest?
Good! can't wait to read more!!!
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by Dread These Moments Alone 4/3/08maybe expand a bit on some parts though, try not to rush onwards,
take time to show her emotions through every point,
think how you'd feel in that situation and try and convey that through your writing
greater description helps here
but it's very good, i really like the story line
try not to skip parts though, e.g parents were going to divorce, then suddenly she was living with her dad, maybe have chapters on this, so it helps us get to know her more and her parents
coz atm i was a bit confused by the father's death not brought to tears ((again more emotion from Sam here would help))
u have talent though! want to see what happens next!
can u write in ur blog when u post more so i can come n check it out??
love, a fellow author
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Its brill! But does it end there or is there more to add?
by Emma 4/3/08Love itt!!