The Light of a New Love but a Race to Live
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- Me, Myself, and I
- Kita Jaralds of 16 years of age has lost her parents from war. She now lives with her grandma Ethel Jaralds. Kita has litarly nobody scince her grandma is blind and deaf. She travels with her brother Kit somtimes. Kit loves to take her places but ignores her all the time. Kit is 21 years of age (he likes to flirt alot). Kita and Kit go to California and Kita finds a familar face but dosent know him. They run off together after a party and get lost. What will happen to them?
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So Wrong It's Right1 week agoTwo friends, one summer and a chain of events that change their lives.
Intrigued? You should be.
Based on the works of All Time Low.
http://www.bebo.com/So-Wrong-Its-Right
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76 weeks ago via Mobile
Carole Aldrich
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Laetin Kay110 weeks agoo m like g omg i love ur page how long did u have a bebo
this is verey good i like this its verey good
by Bethany S 97 weeks agokeep on writing its good
you should be proud of your self
add more chapters
i wont to know what happens nexe
Good Storyline! its definately a good story line!
by Dread These Moments Alone 121 weeks agoADVICE: if the grandma is both blind and deaf, she wudnt b able 2 speak and she wouldnt know if anyone was there.....maybe choose either 1 or the other....plus not many grandmas r moody for no reason, mayb u shud add y she acts like this...
CHAPTERS: they dont flow greatly....her parents died, then suddenly there is yellin between Kita n her ex sam, what happened?
ADVICE: u cud put **so many days/weeks later** at the top so we get a sense of time....description would also make us emphasise (sp) with the characters more....coz when i read her parents died i didnt really feel much coz id only met her a few seconds b4 and didnt know much about her...
just some advice, hope u take it on board.
keep writin tho, i love the storyline
its v up to date!
check ur spellings - but dw bout that too much
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by Piggy. 122 weeks agoI liked it, it was quite good, good story line definatly!
Keep it up!
Amii
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i hate filling this space a very unusual plot that gves a lot of strength and asence of obscurity. the prologue was grabbing and i cant wait to read more.
by Jean Anne 124 weeks agocheck out my short stories at www.seducing-you.bebo.com
Ur Book It just doesnt seem to have any spark, i feel as if it's like a dull movie. Like this happens then this...it just the first chapter doesnt get you that much. Like a big wow,type of thing, it just seems to be, here this wat happen. Have at it, which on one of my stories i did that. but...a big wow, would really work. Keep up the good work, Chapter 2 was really, sad i must say, LYLAS sis, and GOOD LUCK!
by Princess Euphemia Li Britannia 128 weeks ago^^
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