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My Annie
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- Profile created: February 2007
- www.bebo.com/MyAnnieForAnne
- Category:
- Fiction
- Publisher:
- Sarah O"brien
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- Me, Myself, and I
- My Annie is a tribute to my Aunt Anne who died at the age of five.
Anne was said to be too beautiful to belong on this earth. Everyone who saw her said how she looked like a real little angel. White blonde hair, blue eyes and pale rose pink cheeks.
Anne loved to play with the rose petal"s which fell from the rose bush in her garden. A gentle and loving child.
An angel at heart, an angel in looks and always an angel forever.
Enjoy xxx
I"ve more work in here, have a look at it fi u like this..
http://www.bebo.com/When-Alan-died
http://www.bebo.com/reflectionofme
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Mags Beaver4/9/07A lovely story, well written!
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Kerry Belcher3/8/07Hi, LOL! no one can find my book, it never shows up in the fiction section! what a jip!!!! if you copy and paste the http address you'll be takes to it. Stilted can mean a great many different things, Elaborate, wooden, sentimental, pretentious. I meant that it was a little bit to sentumental, though obviously that was the point in regards to this sort of story! Still very nice though!
good its realy quite good despite the rating i gave it i do think its good but i am wondering why everyone is dyeing ? is it based on your aunts life or is it based on the fact that she died at a young age. also i think you should make it longer and go into detail. its good though.
by Tamsin Balcanquall 8/23/07check out http://www.bebo.com/whatwhyandwhen and then you can be just as brutal about my writing lol
kissesx
sad that was really sad but i liked it. it was good writing.
by Smurphy Lee 8/12/07please read mine and tell me if you liked it.
http://www.bebo.com/adaughtersintuition
that was sad but so good that was really good but it was pretty sad. i'm sorry for your aunt. could you please review my book at alandlikenoother.bebo.com ? thank you so much. i loved your story.
by Victoria L 6/13/07account come all to MRwhoopazz profile
by rock lee 6/11/07brill i am sorry about youre aunt but that book was brill
by Sponge Bob Rawks 5/6/07Very Good I am sorry about your auntie, but the book is very good.
by AnnieAttackk 5/6/07Nice I thought your story to be sweet and sad. I could almost imagine it as a mini tv play, however, technically your writing could do with some polish. Try writing on word first and check for grammar, spelling etc and then copy and pasting the final product. Alternatively ask a friend to proof read the finished article to ensure you haven't left any hidden mistakes.
by Shirley Dee 3/10/07However, I still thought the piece was nice and I would be interested to see if there are other stories you could tell.
Please feel free to pop along to my book and leave your thoughts -
<taleswithatwist>.
Hope to read more soon
Shirley x
klkl so sorry about ur ant good story thoe
by . 3/6/07review It's a pretty sentiment and a lovely tribute to your aunt.
by Kerry Belcher 3/6/07To be honest though I found the writing a little stilted, although the beginning was very good. The first paragraph was quite gripping.
My book is on http://TheBetrayed.bebo.com
Let me know what you think.