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Dragon Quest
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- Profile created: February 2007
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- Me, Myself, and I
- 4 Teenagers. 2 Worlds. 1 big adventure.
4 teenagers find themselves in a new world with dragons ,elves and evil wizards. When their friend Matt gets kidnapped they race across two worlds to save their friend and to save both worlds from a terrible evil.
If you think this book will be obvious you will be very surprised when it's finished.
Please read the first chapter again as it is edited.
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final fantasy rocks4/20/09join please
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Jaden Yuki9/16/07Hi this is the author on an account i made when i was bored and still into yugioh. My account that I wrote this in got deleted and then my new one got deleted again and the my third one got deleted. I made one more account and lo and behold it got effing deleted so sorry to everyone who wanted to read the rest, I'm giving this account away and I'm not bothered to make a new account but thank you very much even for the criticism, because it been a great help.
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Lucian3/11/07it is lyk eragon but u should keep writing it ok. av started writing a fantasy book so any1 that lyks that sort of thing chek it out. http://NewKnight.bebo.com
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Heather McLaren2/23/07
PLEASE work on grammar! Your sentences are too long! I write (and read) a lot of fantasy like this, and I just think it's too predictable. It's not bad, but it doesn't really inspire me at all. Maybe if the next few chapters were a bit more original, and written with a bit more... -I dunno, style?- you might be able to resolve it. You don't have to listen to this, by the way. Just my opinion.
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William2/23/07
{{please read review}} but just to put it generally it wasn't That bad really!! You need more description, and less full stops
if anyone gets a chance could they read my book; http://asterynth.bebo.com thanx
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NathanH2/23/07I think its a very interesting story that could turn into a series
Good so far I think its really good so far but it needs some more work! Its like Eragon which lucklily is one of my fav books!
by Straight State. 2/1/08could b better not great so far
but it could be good if you added more story
by Peter F 10/19/07not bad Not a bad effort but you have obviously just read Eragon. Don't worry - he ripped off Star Wars anyway!
by Graham Foss 8/23/07You need to work on your pacing in future episodes. It reads more like a summary than prose.
hmmmm I kinda lost the plot when you went into his flashback and then just straight back but otherwise very good.
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by ~~~/|/|^&&&!@�$%^&*(()David Powell())*&^%$�@!&&&^|\|\~~~ 7/26/07good start gr8 story u are gr8 writer
by Dec Appleyard 6/24/07bit too much like eragon though ....although sotries may inspire u dont copy the plot and that lol if did my story would be grodo and the nechlace made in the firey pit of moregor lol can u plz review my story
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Cool A realy good start but its a bit short and doesent have much detail. I cant wait 2 read the rest!
by Luky Hunni Bunni Xxx 6/6/07visualization I like that you described how the assasant cut the father with the knife. Also, how the father cut the left ear to the mouth.
by Ashley Escotto 5/7/07